Lisa Rosenau
Exercise 2: Story 2 Chapter 9
An accident involving four tractor trailers and 14 cars occurred this morning that left two people dead and 20 others injured. Two people driving cars were killed and four others were seriously hurt with life threatening injuries. The accident began when two tractor trailers collided and started a chain reaction. Police are not through investigating the crash but that is the preliminary belief of events. No charges have been filed against the tractor trailer drivers.
Sgt. Wei of the police department stated that one of the tractor trailers was hauling diesel fuel and was very lucky because it didn’t roll over or dump any fuel. The driver managed to pull the truck to the side of the road after being hit by a car. Fire chief Tony Sullivan said that the scene of the accident looked like something from a war zone; bodies lying along the road, people sitting in their cars covered in blood and emergency workers running all over attempting to help the injured.
The damage to vehicles was extensive, Sullivan mentioned that the firefighters had to cut the roofs off three of the cars to free the passengers trapped inside. The interstate where the accident occurred was closed completely for some time after the crash, causing major problems for rush hour drivers. Interstate 690 was used in place of Interstate 790 and traffic was backed up for three hours.
Wow! nice job on your first story! I must agree that you did a very good job of being straight to the point! I would suggest though to use, more creative adjectives to add color and taste! :)
ReplyDeleteI really like your story, and you took much the same approach as I did. However, taking the same approach brings with it the good and the bad. I think you need to add a little more length to your story. Fun read though.
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